Thanks! All very helpful - and I agree that June should probably look at these for the Britspeak/dialect; I lived in England for two years as a child and have visited a few times, but we lived in the South (Kent and Oxfordshire), and that's no help with the Northern dialect. But I'm actually a bit scared to have her look at my stuff - partly because I'm shy and new at this, and partly because I did send her an (admittedly long) essay in which I'd quoted her, and she never got back to me at all. How would I go about asking her to check, then? Should I just ask her? Friend her? or what?
In fact, the headmaster suspected Sirius’s real loathing of Severus dated from the time Severus had defended Sirius’s small brother Regulus from Sirius and his gang.
"I think in PoA, Sirius & Remus state that Snape & Sirius were at each other's throats from the word "go", and Regulus didn't come until at least a year later. Also, if my speculation is correct, someone had already hexed Snape's broom on what was probably close to his first flying lesson; assuming that the curriculum was the same, this should have been early first year."
Yes - you're right, they were, and I'm positive they hexed his broom early in first year, and probably started the hostilities, since I am of the opinion that James is to Draco as Harry is to Severus. But this is Dumbledore's point of view, and, although I think he knew they pretty much hated each other's guts from the word 'go', I also think, from his pov, it didn't get absolutely vicious until Sirius saw and objected to Severus's influence on his brother. I'm not sure Dumbledore knew, *at that point* about the broom hexing or any of the rest of it. He knew *later*, when he'd taught Snape a bit - but not necessarily right then, if you see what I mean?
"As an aside, I have a rather firm opinion that Snape's Patronus was a King Cobra ([info]accioslash rather quickly convinced me that it's NOW a Phoenix...!) *wink* Although I must say I like the Griffin better than the typical Raven, Spider or Bat. (*gag*)"
Yes, I know we don't agree on this - I read and enjoyed your 'after the war' story. But, though it did take me awhile to come round to this opinion, I have reasons for the griffin, one of them being that I believe Snape is the heir of Gryffindor. In any case, the king cobra and the griffin are very similar animals, since both are loners, predators, and guardians of treasure (thinking of "The Jungle Book" here - "The King's Ankus")
Another q - are you quite sure the possessive of Severus is just Severus', not Severus's? I was going by Strunk and White, who are my grammar/punctuation bible.
All the stuff on the quotes - yes, I noticed, and it bothered me. I do not use word unless I'm required to - did these in Appleworks - so I don't quite know what's up, but I'll try to see if Appleworks has something similar, and then correct it.
I'm afraid the rest was just typos, and middle- aged eyes, and I will fix!
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In fact, the headmaster suspected Sirius’s real loathing of Severus dated from the time Severus had defended Sirius’s small brother Regulus from Sirius and his gang.
"I think in PoA, Sirius & Remus state that Snape & Sirius were at each other's throats from the word "go", and Regulus didn't come until at least a year later. Also, if my speculation is correct, someone had already hexed Snape's broom on what was probably close to his first flying lesson; assuming that the curriculum was the same, this should have been early first year."
Yes - you're right, they were, and I'm positive they hexed his broom early in first year, and probably started the hostilities, since I am of the opinion that James is to Draco as Harry is to Severus. But this is Dumbledore's point of view, and, although I think he knew they pretty much hated each other's guts from the word 'go', I also think, from his pov, it didn't get absolutely vicious until Sirius saw and objected to Severus's influence on his brother. I'm not sure Dumbledore knew, *at that point* about the broom hexing or any of the rest of it. He knew *later*, when he'd taught Snape a bit - but not necessarily right then, if you see what I mean?
"As an aside, I have a rather firm opinion that Snape's Patronus was a King Cobra ([info]accioslash rather quickly convinced me that it's NOW a Phoenix...!) *wink* Although I must say I like the Griffin better than the typical Raven, Spider or Bat. (*gag*)"
Yes, I know we don't agree on this - I read and enjoyed your 'after the war' story. But, though it did take me awhile to come round to this opinion, I have reasons for the griffin, one of them being that I believe Snape is the heir of Gryffindor. In any case, the king cobra and the griffin are very similar animals, since both are loners, predators, and guardians of treasure (thinking of "The Jungle Book" here - "The King's Ankus")
Another q - are you quite sure the possessive of Severus is just Severus', not Severus's? I was going by Strunk and White, who are my grammar/punctuation bible.
All the stuff on the quotes - yes, I noticed, and it bothered me. I do not use word unless I'm required to - did these in Appleworks - so I don't quite know what's up, but I'll try to see if Appleworks has something similar, and then correct it.
I'm afraid the rest was just typos, and middle- aged eyes, and I will fix!