http://wildgirl116.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] wildgirl116.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] mary_j_59 2007-08-23 04:12 am (UTC)

Good so far: Will it continue

This seems like the beginning to a great story, because it hints at so many things without giving any concrete answers. We are told only that these children are renouncing their families in order to protect them, because the children will become criminals. That in and of itself is intriguing, and you have a great, very descriptive writing style which makes it entertaining to read. You've really got something here, and you should keep going with it!

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