http://deirdrej.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] deirdrej.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] mary_j_59 2011-03-18 01:54 pm (UTC)

Aargh! Sorry -- I forgot!

Sentence structure, second to last sentence? Should it be strictly parallel, or not?

He hopes his brother ... and that
OR
He hopes that his brother ... and that

This is even more minor that my last point, because it's just about rhythm and page visuals. Nothing else.

I'm thinking maybe I like it best the way you have it (despite my fondness for parallel sentence structures).

What do you think?

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