Possible entry for the Bulwer-Lytton contest?

[mary_j_59]

While browsing another thread, I came across this entry, and wondered how on earth I'd failed to cross-post it here. What do you think? Should I enter the contest?

Frieda, the scrawny, downtrodden serving wench, wiped her nose with the back of her hand and gaped at the vision of beauty that had stopped in the doorway: a knight, his eyes flashing like coals, his hair the gold of new-drawn ale, and his armor shining like the sun upon rising.

mary

Comments

[deirdrej.livejournal.com]

Ha! I have it! What if you end the last sentence like this:

...and his armor shining brighter than her newly polished floor, its perfection now marred slightly by the roast she had just dropped in her amazement.

Absurdity. It's a talent of mine. :-D

[mary-j-59.livejournal.com]

Yes, it is! And that's not a bad thing. Based on what you showed me tonight, I'm far from being a winner, but we could keep working on it. :)