I think it sounds great -- And I rather disagree with Missfloraposte, because I don't think the mention of explosives is slowing things down at all. My only quibble (well, OK, everybody has to have one!) is with the last sentence. How about something like...
If Kiril survives, he will have to find a kind of courage he has never imagined before. Or words to that effect.
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Date: 2010-08-05 08:30 pm (UTC)I think it sounds great -- And I rather disagree with Missfloraposte, because I don't think the mention of explosives is slowing things down at all. My only quibble (well, OK, everybody has to have one!) is with the last sentence. How about something like...
If Kiril survives, he will have to find a kind of courage he has never imagined before. Or words to that effect.
I think it's reading very well -- Yay, Mary!