I'm not sure, Terri. (This is Terri, isn't it?) Of course the sword was named during the renunciation - EVERYTHING was! - but I don't really think I need to make its role as a symbol of freedom clear at this stage of the game. In fact, I don't think I want to do anything as heavy-handed as giving the sword a name! (After all, it's not Excalibur or Anduril, nor is Kiril Aragorn or Arthur. He's just a young freeman, a sprig of minor nobility, whose ancestor was a servant and whose stepmother is a slave.)To me, your title works because it is as true to the young MC and his goals and character as "honor" is, and because it is more intriguing. I think a reader, coming across such a title, would be curious about what it promised. And that's why it's a better title than "honor", even though for me it works essentially as a rephrasing. The story is all about the last sentences of the legend. Both your title and my original one get at that, but yours is a lot more evocative.
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Re: Titles
Date: 2014-03-14 02:38 pm (UTC)So thanks again! I really love it!